6/13/09

55 fiction: A hidden truth


He opened the window wide, he believed faith would come in with the wind.
He knew she'd made him the happiest person on Earth after the night.

She was lying peacefully, with nothing but a white blanket over her. Her beautiful brown hair covering her lily white face.

He kissed her.Softly.A kiss to end the torture and pain.


And put the dagger inside her chest.

45 comments:

  1. u know i'll say just one word for this one...

    *sexy*

    mwah! keep it coming...

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  2. Nahinnnnnnnnn!!! Why did he do that now?!

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  3. i did soemthing on the same lines... and guess what that was 55 fiction as well...

    u managed it brilliantly well,,,carries a hint of possessiveness and 'all for me' spirit...

    and why do i feel that u changed ur template again...in case u dint, dont blast me off, i dont notice them much... but the color purple -m loving it-very subtle...

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  4. dark again :)....but yeah it was good he gave her the beautiful kiss :)..

    urs..hemu..

    p.s:i put the modified write also in my post u gave :)..

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  5. You've started to scare me!!! You love writing dark stuff.

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  6. Y did he do that?
    the image kinda ruined the surprise for me.. but really beautiful writing..

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  7. yeh kya howa??? why did he do that??

    love the new look!

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  8. basic instinct movie flashed across my memory cells

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  9. I think u need to xplain a bit more..! Just y did he do that..?
    Oh n ur too gud at writing dark stuff..! :)

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  10. hi..
    nice one..
    bt why always such sad kindda fiction..
    try some happy n joyful things..

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  11. the first part was as like wat shruti said "sexy" ;)

    well the second...no definitions..on it..
    ahhhh!!

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  12. oye teko bhi lag gayaa 55 fiction ka kiidaa....

    This was dramatic....Basic instinct is right....Dark and gory...Did I say that it defines your blog :P

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  13. @ Shruti,
    Muuah..thanks a zillion!

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  14. @ Aneri,
    Thats on your imagination.. on my dimmaag.i had it because she cheated on him, and he caught her.. so he killed his lover . :)..love hurts!

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  15. @ Gypsy,
    O really? Will read it..
    and yea..I did =)..love purple .

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  16. @ Hemanth,
    I read the version..seemed satisfactory to me =)
    Thanks.. aah..the kiss.lol!

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  17. @ Rakesh,
    Come on..not all are dark! This one was randoooom!

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  18. @ Amal,
    Had added the img towards the end..then put it on top jlt!

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  19. @ Sunshine,
    Ditto Aneri's reply..
    *Thats on your imagination.. on my dimmaag.i had it because she cheated on him, and he caught her.. so he killed his lover . :)..love can be painful!


    Thankyou so much!

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  20. @ Chriz,
    Call that the inspiration then! :)

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  21. @ Pree,
    Ditto Meher's reply..
    Thnx..!!

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  22. @ Sahityika,
    Try the last post..I don't think it was sad.

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  23. @ Arv,
    Hell..nO!..light's always thr..some darkness stays in reserve! :D

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  24. @ Anurag,
    nooo..you didn't :P
    Thanku thanku!

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  25. awesome! well done!

    following ur blog from now on, keep writing, would love to come here again! Do visit!

    Cheers!

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  26. ur 55 fictions are just perfect !!

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  27. oopsss beautifully dark it was aayu. :)

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  28. The kiss of death?

    Good one Crystal. A bit too 'real' for me ;-)

    Keshi.

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  29. @ Hopeless,
    Visited you tooo..thanks for being here.

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  30. @ Preetilata,
    Was beautiful?

    Thanks.

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  31. @ Keshi,
    Yes, precisely a kiss of death. haha!

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  32. dark is beautiful too.. at least literature makes it.. and so do u :)

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  33. This was a perfect shot.. I read your most recent 55 fiction, and i thought i have read better than this ones from you...and here itself it is..This one simply too good! Sexy! ;)

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  34. Liked this one...dark and...nice :D

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  35. @ Rushabh,
    Yayy.. thankyou so much! =)

    # Mads,
    Thankyou thankyou!

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  36. errr you hid all posts on the other blog?

    I think this post was duplicated there wasn't it? And I commented there right.

    At least let me know what the comment was, so that I can repost it here exactly like that ;)

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