6/20/09

55 fiction : Let the smoke stay ..


How long could she hide the tears? This or that? She'd been thinking for long.

She could see just one solution.
She took out one more cigarette and lit it.

Let the smoke stay, its more clear than my life.

66 comments:

  1. Wow, that had quite a deep meaning in it :)
    Loved it!

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  2. dis is too gud!!!i'v no words 4 this..

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  3. Ohh....excellent...!!
    Quite intense..!

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  4. that had some really deep meaning to it..
    but all that remains would be ash.. for both

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  5. This was Gooooood! "The smoke is clear than my life" lovely :)

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  6. ending wali line ne maar dala! :*

    btw, whr d hell do u get these kickass pics 4m?

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  7. Main fikrr ko dhuen mein udataa chalaa gayaa ...

    Nice post ...But tere post mein bahut zyada pollution ho gayaa hain yaar...ni-che waala post dhuaan ...yahaan bhi dhuaaan ...Mujhe next time toliyaa leke aanaa padegaa :D :D

    *Cough Cough*

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  8. have u heard the song-cigarette-this one reminded me of it... :)

    i loved the pic and nys way to depict the diff. between confusion and assorted reality...

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  9. reminds me of my smoking days... :(

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  10. intense is the only word.. sorry that i was away from this place, including mine, for some days :)

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  11. can relate to it.. sometimes even i like it.. when i am on a self-destruction mode!

    very well written

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  12. oooo !! damn cool ! .. but its still unhealthy ... very. :P

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  13. @ M,
    Thanks a lot.
    I wish you'd had a profile link..would have wanted to visit your blog.

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  14. @ Anwesa,
    Really?
    *smiles*
    Thanks a LOT! =)

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  15. @ Pavitra,
    Thankyou so much. =)

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  16. @ Amal,
    Sometimes the ash can be used to cover the wounds..pain healer.*sigh*
    Anyway..thanks.

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  17. @ Rakesh,
    Came in jlt when I saw an add on TV about smokin'.
    Thanks

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  18. @ Shatabdi,
    Sachi? Thankyou babey.
    Pics are from www.deviantart.com
    They've got an AWESOME collection.

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  19. @ Anurag,
    I <3 that song completely..too meaningful :D
    And yes..gas mask pehno..quiiiick!

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  20. @ Gypsy,
    Thanks..

    no..haven't heard it..which band/artist ?

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  21. @ Arv,
    Wasn't really on smoking,buddy..more on a hazy vision life leaves you with!

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  22. @ Shravan,
    No need to apologise..great tht you're back.

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  23. @ Shruti,
    PRECISELY. That's the self-destruction streak which comes in at times.
    Thankie

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  24. @ Chriz,
    Chuck smoking. the text?

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  25. @ Hp,
    Happened after an AD on tv ;)..this text that is!
    Smoking..don't smoke, they are cooler ways to die.

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  26. Nice one.. trust me.. it helps.. :)

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  27. wowwwww....wowwwww i liked it girl.

    har fikra ko dhunye mein udata chala gaya... :)

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  28. its like gum ka saathi rum!!

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  29. hmmm...i was away for sometime...missed a lot in here i guess...

    @post

    majestic and true!

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  30. wow that was something Crystal! Deep.

    one of my cuzns smoke...she often says things like that when I ask her not to smoke.

    Keshi.

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  31. a deep thought .. interesting write !

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  32. again .. a nice work..
    few words.. n deep meaning... :)

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  33. again .. a nice work..
    few words.. n deep meaning... :)

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  34. okay! so devianart it is! :P

    wht abt sachi?

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  35. in the haze I see more clearly, let it always remain!!!
    Kash laga:D
    super stuff!!!

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  36. LEt your sharp writing skills stay on and on..... Amen.

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  37. i have vodka instead of a sutta.
    nice one though...

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  38. writing on smoke..waah ..alag hai..yeh bhi aur iske niche wali poem bhi...
    bohot aachi hai...tumhare writing se tumhare age ka pata lagana mushkil hai bohot..

    and yeah new template suits you

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  39. u sure r on a roll wid 55 fiction stories,, girl.. :-) n guess wat kinda have me into it too,, tried one myself.. :-)

    but ofcourse,, u r a pro.. :-) vry profound..!!

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  40. hiee...
    thats really nice...
    brief...bt so deep..
    gr88 work!

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  41. Let the smoke stay, its more clear than my life.

    Simply Superb!!!!

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  42. deep..too deep! Awesome one dear :)

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  43. hi im visiting your blog after quite a while... real nice post... but she still wouldnt be able to decide this or that.. :p i know that is the point .... i tend to drag things a lil too much :)

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  44. Liked this post a lot....
    why such a dark one re :O

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  45. @ Dark,
    I think it may

    @ Preetilata,
    Shayad woh akela tareeka hota hai kabhi kabhi..
    I <3 that song btw

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  46. @ Richa,
    Thankyou,girlie..

    @ mayz,
    aur haare pyaar ka saathi apne par vaar?

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  47. @ Enchant,
    Thats totally okay with me..
    Thnx.

    @ Keshi,
    Sometimes people lose their way :)

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  48. @ Pretty Me,
    Thanks a lot!

    @ Sahityika,
    Thnx..

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  49. @ Express,
    *Sacchi as in really?


    @ Saim,
    If this kinda view is bettah..let it remain.
    Thanks bhai.

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  50. @ Warm,
    Thankyou.
    55f suits me I guess.

    @ Indrajit,
    Thankyou for the support!

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  51. # Rabbit,
    Whatever may suit the mood.
    Thankya..

    @ Joie,
    Thankyou girl..went for a change sometime back..
    forget about the age..I don't want to grow up too early.

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  52. @ Muzer,
    You did? I'll have to check out soon..
    have been so effing irregular!

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  53. Heya Parzi..hope you're doing good with your blog..
    thnx a lot!

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  54. Thankyou, Sachi..
    and yea..welcome back!

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  55. @ Harini,
    Decide this or that as in? :\
    Thanks for vistin'..

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  56. @ Mads,
    Not dark..just random mumbo jumbo!

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  57. hmm.. me too think tht smoke helps
    :-)

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  58. Are you for real Aayu ? This is unbelievable :) I've read too much today and now I feel like I just can't write.

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