6/20/09

55 fiction : Let the smoke stay ..


How long could she hide the tears? This or that? She'd been thinking for long.

She could see just one solution.
She took out one more cigarette and lit it.

Let the smoke stay, its more clear than my life.
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66 comments:

  1. AnonymousJune 20, 2009 at 3:48 PM

    Wow, that had quite a deep meaning in it :)
    Loved it!

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  2. AnwesaJune 20, 2009 at 4:07 PM

    dis is too gud!!!i'v no words 4 this..

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  3. PavitraJune 20, 2009 at 4:10 PM

    Ohh....excellent...!!
    Quite intense..!

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  4. Amal BoseJune 20, 2009 at 4:16 PM

    that had some really deep meaning to it..
    but all that remains would be ash.. for both

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  5. AnonymousJune 20, 2009 at 5:19 PM

    This was Gooooood! "The smoke is clear than my life" lovely :)

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  6. ExpressJune 20, 2009 at 5:27 PM

    ending wali line ne maar dala! :*

    btw, whr d hell do u get these kickass pics 4m?

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  7. AnuragJune 20, 2009 at 5:46 PM

    Main fikrr ko dhuen mein udataa chalaa gayaa ...

    Nice post ...But tere post mein bahut zyada pollution ho gayaa hain yaar...ni-che waala post dhuaan ...yahaan bhi dhuaaan ...Mujhe next time toliyaa leke aanaa padegaa :D :D

    *Cough Cough*

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  8. Pree-yea....June 20, 2009 at 6:06 PM

    Amazing write!! Lovely!

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  9. gypsyJune 20, 2009 at 6:28 PM

    have u heard the song-cigarette-this one reminded me of it... :)

    i loved the pic and nys way to depict the diff. between confusion and assorted reality...

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  10. ArvJune 20, 2009 at 7:20 PM

    reminds me of my smoking days... :(

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  11. Shravan RNJune 20, 2009 at 8:00 PM

    intense is the only word.. sorry that i was away from this place, including mine, for some days :)

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  12. ShrutiJune 20, 2009 at 9:11 PM

    can relate to it.. sometimes even i like it.. when i am on a self-destruction mode!

    very well written

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  13. AnonymousJune 20, 2009 at 9:27 PM

    smoking kills

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  14. PhoenixJune 20, 2009 at 10:41 PM

    intense very intense... :)

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  15. HPJune 20, 2009 at 10:41 PM

    oooo !! damn cool ! .. but its still unhealthy ... very. :P

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  16. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:05 PM

    @ M,
    Thanks a lot.
    I wish you'd had a profile link..would have wanted to visit your blog.

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  17. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:05 PM

    @ Anwesa,
    Really?
    *smiles*
    Thanks a LOT! =)

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  18. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:06 PM

    @ Pavitra,
    Thankyou so much. =)

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  19. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:06 PM

    @ Amal,
    Sometimes the ash can be used to cover the wounds..pain healer.*sigh*
    Anyway..thanks.

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  20. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:06 PM

    @ Rakesh,
    Came in jlt when I saw an add on TV about smokin'.
    Thanks

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  21. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:07 PM

    @ Shatabdi,
    Sachi? Thankyou babey.
    Pics are from www.deviantart.com
    They've got an AWESOME collection.

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  22. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:08 PM

    @ Anurag,
    I <3 that song completely..too meaningful :D
    And yes..gas mask pehno..quiiiick!

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  23. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:08 PM

    @ Pree-yea,
    Thankyou so much!

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  24. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:09 PM

    @ Gypsy,
    Thanks..

    no..haven't heard it..which band/artist ?

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  25. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:10 PM

    @ Arv,
    Wasn't really on smoking,buddy..more on a hazy vision life leaves you with!

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  26. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:10 PM

    @ Shravan,
    No need to apologise..great tht you're back.

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  27. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:10 PM

    @ Shruti,
    PRECISELY. That's the self-destruction streak which comes in at times.
    Thankie

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  28. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:11 PM

    @ Chriz,
    Chuck smoking. the text?

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  29. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:11 PM

    Phoenix,
    Thankyou mate. =)

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  30. CяystalJune 20, 2009 at 11:11 PM

    @ Hp,
    Happened after an AD on tv ;)..this text that is!
    Smoking..don't smoke, they are cooler ways to die.

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  31. GKJune 21, 2009 at 12:20 AM

    Nice one.. trust me.. it helps.. :)

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  32. Preetilata【ツ】June 21, 2009 at 1:23 PM

    wowwwww....wowwwww i liked it girl.

    har fikra ko dhunye mein udata chala gaya... :)

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  33. RichaJune 21, 2009 at 5:08 PM

    very good :)

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  34. LuciferJune 21, 2009 at 5:35 PM

    its like gum ka saathi rum!!

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  35. enchantingankiJune 21, 2009 at 10:46 PM

    hmmm...i was away for sometime...missed a lot in here i guess...

    @post

    majestic and true!

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  36. KeshiJune 22, 2009 at 10:58 AM

    wow that was something Crystal! Deep.

    one of my cuzns smoke...she often says things like that when I ask her not to smoke.

    Keshi.

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  37. AnonymousJune 22, 2009 at 11:40 AM

    a deep thought .. interesting write !

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  38. SAHITYIKAJune 22, 2009 at 10:09 PM

    again .. a nice work..
    few words.. n deep meaning... :)

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  39. SAHITYIKAJune 22, 2009 at 10:09 PM

    again .. a nice work..
    few words.. n deep meaning... :)

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  40. ExpressJune 22, 2009 at 11:50 PM

    okay! so devianart it is! :P

    wht abt sachi?

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  41. SaimJune 24, 2009 at 11:47 AM

    in the haze I see more clearly, let it always remain!!!
    Kash laga:D
    super stuff!!!

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  42. WarmSunshineJune 25, 2009 at 10:02 AM

    Short and intense!

    good work! :)

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  43. IndrajitJune 25, 2009 at 9:00 PM

    LEt your sharp writing skills stay on and on..... Amen.

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  44. rainboyJune 26, 2009 at 6:13 PM

    i have vodka instead of a sutta.
    nice one though...

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  45. joie de vivreJune 26, 2009 at 11:03 PM

    writing on smoke..waah ..alag hai..yeh bhi aur iske niche wali poem bhi...
    bohot aachi hai...tumhare writing se tumhare age ka pata lagana mushkil hai bohot..

    and yeah new template suits you

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  46. muZerJune 27, 2009 at 1:45 AM

    u sure r on a roll wid 55 fiction stories,, girl.. :-) n guess wat kinda have me into it too,, tried one myself.. :-)

    but ofcourse,, u r a pro.. :-) vry profound..!!

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  47. parziJune 27, 2009 at 5:22 PM

    hiee...
    thats really nice...
    brief...bt so deep..
    gr88 work!

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  48. Shikha AryaJune 29, 2009 at 1:21 PM

    Let the smoke stay, its more clear than my life.

    Simply Superb!!!!

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  49. Sach1June 30, 2009 at 1:38 AM

    deep..too deep! Awesome one dear :)

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  50. ♪♪Happy Go Lucky♪♪July 1, 2009 at 7:00 PM

    hi im visiting your blog after quite a while... real nice post... but she still wouldnt be able to decide this or that.. :p i know that is the point .... i tend to drag things a lil too much :)

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  51. MadsJuly 2, 2009 at 4:49 PM

    Liked this post a lot....
    why such a dark one re :O

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  52. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:03 PM

    @ Dark,
    I think it may

    @ Preetilata,
    Shayad woh akela tareeka hota hai kabhi kabhi..
    I <3 that song btw

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  53. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:04 PM

    @ Richa,
    Thankyou,girlie..

    @ mayz,
    aur haare pyaar ka saathi apne par vaar?

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  54. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:04 PM

    @ Enchant,
    Thats totally okay with me..
    Thnx.

    @ Keshi,
    Sometimes people lose their way :)

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  55. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:05 PM

    @ Pretty Me,
    Thanks a lot!

    @ Sahityika,
    Thnx..

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  56. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:06 PM

    @ Express,
    *Sacchi as in really?


    @ Saim,
    If this kinda view is bettah..let it remain.
    Thanks bhai.

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  57. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:07 PM

    @ Warm,
    Thankyou.
    55f suits me I guess.

    @ Indrajit,
    Thankyou for the support!

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  58. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:08 PM

    # Rabbit,
    Whatever may suit the mood.
    Thankya..

    @ Joie,
    Thankyou girl..went for a change sometime back..
    forget about the age..I don't want to grow up too early.

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  59. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:09 PM

    @ Muzer,
    You did? I'll have to check out soon..
    have been so effing irregular!

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  60. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:09 PM

    Heya Parzi..hope you're doing good with your blog..
    thnx a lot!

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  61. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:10 PM

    Thanks a lot, Shikha!

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  62. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:10 PM

    Thankyou, Sachi..
    and yea..welcome back!

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  63. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:11 PM

    @ Harini,
    Decide this or that as in? :\
    Thanks for vistin'..

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  64. CяystalJuly 4, 2009 at 4:12 PM

    @ Mads,
    Not dark..just random mumbo jumbo!

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  65. wildflowerNovember 7, 2009 at 8:51 PM

    hmm.. me too think tht smoke helps
    :-)

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  66. AyushiNovember 22, 2011 at 4:37 PM

    Are you for real Aayu ? This is unbelievable :) I've read too much today and now I feel like I just can't write.

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