11/9/08

Fly away

Let me escape this world
Let me hide somewhere in the debris of tomorrow.

Ask that apparition hounding my eyes to fly away
Someone close the door which life has opened again

I don't want to live,I don't want to survive.
Perhaps the fabricated world is enough for only a demon to suffice.

Take the sun,give me the moon.
Take the banes,give me JUST one boon.

51 comments:

  1. granted bachcha ... dont write such sad poems ...or write them but don't be sad :)..

    oh btw mera template is fom blogcrowds ..but i can't be sure

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  2. i agree with think tank. nicely written. but dont be sad.

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  3. New to your blog girl....

    Must say This is such a brilliantly written line

    "the fabricated world is enough for only a demon to suffice."

    So wish that I could Write Like that ......
    *Sigh*

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  4. **the fabricated world is only enough for a demon to suffice**

    nice ! :)

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  5. //Someone close the door which life has opened again


    //Take the banes,give me JUST one boon

    contradictions?? look around, there're boons galore :)


    another amazin piece by crystal! :)

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  6. Awesome lines.. But do you write them just like that or do you write them based on your mood??


    P.S: If its the later, then why such a sad one??

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  7. Sometimes we all want to hide ourselves and FLY AWAY from all that we are surrounded with and carve a niche for ourselves where life would be the way we want it to be..
    But that isn't possible..
    Beautiful Lines..
    And unlike others I wont say "Dont write Sad poEms" as i feel that our writing reflect the kind of mood we may be going through at the moment..
    So..Keep Writing and I am sure like sad one a happy one would come out soon..
    Cheerss...!!!

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  8. the apparition is gonan fly away, n ya're gonan keep being here, n keep giving us your poems as boons..
    i pray now, take away the banes! :D

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  9. oyeee..wht happened mera pingu baby??? d poem..needless to say is fab..n i'll grant u as many boons u like..but 4 dat to happen..u'll hv to SMILE! :D

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  10. Brilliant, I tell you, BRILLIANT!

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  11. Looks like a poem of a soul which has seen many of the darker sides of life.

    Well written

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  12. Why is everyone so sad this day??? Anyway!! Well written girl... God bless ya!!!

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  13. its as usual brilliantly written...par hua kya hai bachcha???

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  14. loved the poetry... hope you are not sad mate... take care...

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  15. Nice poetry...
    Bt I've a question??

    >>Let me hide somewhere in the debris of tomorrow.
    did u mean yesterday?

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  16. wut can I say but only u can write this beautifully, even the hardest of emotions!

    loved it. expresses exactly how I feel right now. FABRICATED world it is...made for ppl who can only be devils.


    Keshi.

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  17. awesome post!!

    but y r ya feeling so??i thot it was only me who was left lurking at the mariana trench of emotions??

    bang on u are..its a FABRICATED world and 95pc of ppl arnd wud agree tho der are a few souls hu still think else...

    ITS TIME FOR A CHANGE!! :)

    -Multi

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  18. btw,this skin looks real nice..

    Cheers..

    -Multi

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  19. Looks like blue is the color of the season... You, me, keshi... was it just the weekend or something about approaching winters...but sim ilar reflective posts bordering on a bit of deepseated ache
    whatever it is, as long as you can still think of 'debris of tmrw'...things will shine up.

    :P have blogrolled u sometime back. Also like the new template.

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  20. @ Think Tank,
    Life's not always beautiful :)


    .

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  21. @ HP,
    Ditto my reply to Farah for yourself.


    =)

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  22. @ Anurag,
    Hey..Welcome here,in that case.

    :)

    And I'm glad you liked it..and no big deal.

    Anyone can write..you just need to poke the poet inside you!

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  23. @ BwC,
    No.
    The first line meant that someone close the door that life keeps on opening..and haunting me about.
    The second statement means I'm tired of all the banes this life has given me,and I wan't a boon!

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  24. @ Shrav,
    Perhaps to take out frustration..perhaps b'cos..er..just like that! :)

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  25. @ Charu,
    PHEW!
    One person different from the clan.Thankyou,lady! :)

    Em gld you liked it..and..welcome here!

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  26. @ Trinaa,
    Pingu baby is fine =)
    I wish boons could be granted taht easily..I wish!

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  27. @ I walk alone,
    People write wht they feel,sad or not

    Thankyou!

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  28. Aru,
    No...I meant tomorrow only.
    The past hurts..and the tomorrow is gonna hurt as well..so bury me in the debris of tomorrow..

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  29. @ Kesh,
    Truly said,friend..


    Thanks a lot. :)
    Em glad you liked it!

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  30. i hope that poem is not a reflection of your mind!!

    take care sweety!

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  31. okies...

    >>tomorrow is gonna hurt as well
    u hv blended the assumptions well 2 go vid d theme.

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  32. Hi,

    This is really heart rending :( I truly hope these words do not express your state of mind, for though beautiful they paint a vividly sad picture ...

    Take care, take control.

    Cheers,
    adisha

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  33. "take the sun, give me the moon".. i like. really like.

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  34. @ all.
    thankoiooooooooo...will reply later!!

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  35. @ MM,
    I agree..its a change change needed!

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  36. @ Shoe girl.
    Its the season season season! :D

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