He was sitting by the door of the shop, bearing the pungent smells of different spices, as they were being fried near him in a huge bowl, which he had been seeing since some “ages”. It was a popular dhaaba in which he had been working. He was lazily daydreaming, when he the shop owner coming inside. “Aye Rohan, three cups of tea”. I went down to get them. When I came back after telling the cook to make the tea, I stood at the kitchen’s door, and looked at my master, busy yapping down on his mobile. He found this gadget very peculiar. It had just been introduced, and was totally new for him. Meera didi came walking near him, an
d perched herself on a stool near the kitchen. She started working on the profit and loss of the shop for the current day, but was interrupted by Rohan’s voiceà “Didi, yeah mobile se hum kisi se bhi baat kar sakte hai?”. (Can we talk to anyone with this mobile thingie?)She look up at him, irritated on being interrupted,and hastily replied “Haan. Kar sakte hai.” (Yeah. We can) Seeing her being irritated he kept mum, and went down to lie down, quickly covering his face with the torn and tattered piece of cloth as a “blanket”. He didn’t realize when he feel into a deep sleep, and when he realized, the shop was about to be closed, and there were hardly any people left in the shop. He didn’t have to worry, because he lived nearby, in Meera didi’s mansion. The only difference was that she lived in a mansion, and he in the small and lonely servant quarters. He had seen a PCO near by, and he thought this would be a great chance to talk to the person who he had been longing to. He immediately took some pennies he had saved up, and putting on a woollen cap, hurried towards the PCO. He picked up the receiver and a middle-aged man’s gruff voice came down “Kaun hai?” (Whose it?) “Mai Rohan, mujhe baat karni hai!”(I’m Rohan. I want to talk.) “Tu baat hi kar raha hai, bewakoof”, he replied, with a crustiness in his voice. “Maaf kariyega. Mujhe apni maa se baat karni hai”. (I’m sorry, I want to talk to my mother.) “Number batao, kaha rehti hai?” (Tell me the number, where does she stay?”) “Number toh mujhe nahi pata.” (I don’t know the number) “ Toh kya
“I miss her”

67 comments:
awwww
*sniff*
:( :( :(
mommy!!!!!
sounds like a sad one... i dunno hindi :(
:(...
ps: sent in the mail
Saal ke pehle din hain apne rula diya :(
Emotional and a nice one.
Thodi Sad story hai...par sachchai bhi hai. Jahaan saal ke pehle din kai log 2-5K woh parties jaa rahe hain, paise foonk rahe hain...wahi issi duniya mein kuch bachche apno ke liye tadap rahe hain.. :(
Moving. Touching. :(
I don't even know what to say!! :|
Wondering how real such things are to thousands of people all over the world!! Not exactly in the same way though. Wow!! You already got my train of thoughts to leave the station!!
Good one
Great
see you when I see you... :)
simply beautiful.
Really nice!
Just do one thing more, remove this from the top
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;-)
That's so nice Aayushi ..I wonder what the mann had to say to that when the child told him that.....Just goes to show the mindset of a naive street kid depived of his education and his mother could be like...Sadd...
The above post though needs some editing....Serious Editing :P
mummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmaaaaa! :( :( :(
sissy u made me cry :(....thats a wonderful thing u rote yaar :)....love ya loads sissy :)...some memories did flash reading it :)..
urs..hemu..
Your EQ seems to be high these days Aayushi, wassup?
:( sniff sniff
Poignant. Period.
I've read one on similar lines... Reminded me of it. Innocence.
Peace.
no words aayu. very beautiful and deep.
but in the 4th n 5th line i gues 'I' is there by mistake in place of 'he'
Nicely brought out emotion. Good job done!
Awww so sweet Aayushi...
the child's innocence is so beautifully portrayed...
sad... but beautiful
*hugs*
keep up the good work :)
rude rude telephone operator....
so so innocent kid...
:'-(
Good one aayushi..keep writing..
Sad story to begin the year. But surely need to appreciate your writing. Happy new year girl. Take care. God bless ya!!
ouch...dat was an undertone of love,tho it was a sattire,I loved it.. :)
take care..
Nikhil..
@ Express,
:)
@ Chriz,
The english translation is given,mifriend..
@ Swayam,
Replied..!!
@ Suresh,
Sowwie! :(
I wasn't intending to do that..I simply wanted to put up the emotions of a small innocent kid into words.
Gracias!
@ Smriti,
Rightly said..they live sucha pitiful life, and we over here selfishly hog down our morals and are forevr asking for more.
Thnkyouu!
@ Pranav,
I know,mate..you really have to wonder when such incidents come up in our lives..just watching a kid eating stuff from a dustbin shocked me..but then..thats how the world is.
Em glad you liked it. Tc!
@ Akshaya,
Welcome back..n thankyou!
@ Abhinav,
Lol. Yeah..it generally happen when I cut copy paste stories frm Word Documents :(
Thnks!
@ Anurag,
I know. Loads of editing required..but as far as my readers understand what I write..em too laazy to do that ! ;)
@ Tinnnni,
Aaawww..:-*
@ Hemz,
Thankya bro..
But whch memories flashed up in your mnd?
@ Rakesh,
EQ?
Sowwwie? *
@ Phoenix,
Don't be shoo shaad,baby..
Its a story..though it is true in most cases!
@ Kartz,
I know. Even I was inspired by a scene I saw frm a movie.
Sad world it is! :(
Thanks anyway!
@ Preetu,
Piiich..I know :(
I've got loads of editing to do in this one..thankyou for pointing out the error..and appreciating m work! :)
@ Alok,
Thanks for appreciating it! :)
@ WarmSunshine,
Thankya,Meher!
Even when I read this..I feel a weird sensation inside me..tears pool inside my eyes..tch..
Gracias anyway..em glad you liked it. Muah!
@ The Rat,
Gratias,Ratty.. =)
@ I Walk alone,
Hi..how've you been off late?
Thanks for appreciating it,bro..em glad!
@ MultiMenon,
Thanks,Nikhil =)
:( :( :(
aww....man sooo sad!!!...
The words were very apt....and the story was very much life-like....and the innocence of the child was very sweet to read.....
Keep up the good work...
Take Care
EQ=Emotional Quotient... Especially with the last few posts - meetin with God and all...
beautifully expressed
Reality reality...
Yeah, I echo what you said. Neither happy, nor sad. Living each moment. Shuttling between home and staying with granny. Reading "A Thousand Splendid Suns" and "Time Travel in Einstein's Universe" (the latter, for the nth time!)
Tum batao... School/College keeping you occupied?
Peace.
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Yep, sad world.
I dunno of any movie. I hardly watch movies. But I fail to recollect which book... Darn!
Hi
Well I did not like people being rude to this cute guy.
Touching though...
:(
Tc..
awwweeee... poor thing.. precious post..
awww.. that was a very touching and a very beautiful story :)
Very well written.....but now I want to make sure which service provider reaches that far :)
Hi………
Your words echo in my ear.
Great! Keep writing…….
Good week………
I wish that someone opens up a line to that place soon :(
@ Akshat,
Em soo happy you guys liked it! :)
Thanku thanku!
@ Rakesh,
Aheem..you guessed it right.
Em actually lost in te blues..rather than having an icrease in my Eq! :D
Gratias Abhishek!
Awww!That left me ...
Good one dear :)
quite emo....nice one!
@ Indrajit,
That's the world!
@ Pink Orchid,
Thnkyou! :)
@ Lena,
Em glad the story touched ya...
Graciias!
@ ceedy,
If you find one of the sort..telll me fuurst!
@ Femin Susan,
My good..thnkyouuU! :)
@ Arv,
I really want to be told abt this whenever its done :(
whts the use of all this crap technology whn we can't talk to those up-abv-the-sky b'ful people ? :((
@ Sameera,
Thanks,sweetie =)
Thnkyou Meghdu =)
Emo? lol? =P
And as for my reply to tht post of yuors..I know this isn't a plc to discuss personal matteers..but its high time people started listening to me. =). Sorry if you didn't like it.
wow, such a touching one!! beautifully written!
Thanks a lot,buddy!
Welcome here..
:)
:))
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